Transience
Living from boxcar to boxcar? That means no immediate access to showers, food, Netflix, toilets, beds, etc. Honestly, what’s the appeal? I don’t see it. I don’t understand transients in the same way that I don’t understand monks. But there probably is an appeal, because otherwise like why would people do it. I decided to do some research on what makes people pursue a lifestyle that means giving up all those human comforts that we are so attached to. Unfortunately people on quora were really unhelpful, so I’ll just think of some possibilities. 1. Because society is meaningless Ruth sometimes reminded me of Holden Caulfield. Holden didn’t like the b.s. he sensed in the fronts people put up. He wanted to get away from it all. Ruth could have joined in with the popular dress-making girls, but she didn’t see a point. Both of them were overwhelmed by the pointlessness of a lot of the things people do in an attempt to cohabitate. Ruth wanted to get away fro...
Alrighty Emi, this story has literally quintupled in size since I peer-edited it for you, and I really like it. First question, did you purposefully add more people with names starting with J just because I complained about it while peer-editing? Because there are more!
ReplyDeleteOther than that, I love where you’ve taken the story. I know originally, you weren’t planning to use Jesus as a character, but I love how you’ve woven stories from Mark into Deborah’s own life. I think my favorite scene was probably your retelling of the healing of the paralyzed man, with Deborah’s father as one of the stretcher bearers. I found that very clever. I guess the only thing I think you could change would be more focus on the demon, who’s become less of a character than it was in your original draft. Overall, this is really cool though, Emi. Good job.